100 word challenge#2, Nadine

Finding an odd fish

 

Aah a ginormous eerie fish.Help me somebody save me somebody.Then a fisherman came across the aqua blue glistening water.When he took one glance at the fish he fainted.Then Jessie had a great idea Jessie and flapped into Jessie’s idea was to cook the fish and eat it.But at that last minute the fish bit Jessie and flapped into the water.Then Jessie had to go and get her fishing net and get the fish out of the water.But at that last Minute Jessie slipped into the water.Then she had another great idea.Then Jessie caught the wriggling fat crimson fish. She then told the fish her plan and the fish agreed to her plan.And the fish called all his friends and family.And they all lived happily together.

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  1. Mrs Stones (Team 100WC) said,

    September 14, 2013 @ 8:15 pm     Reply

    Hi Olive,

    Thank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. I love the way you have described the water, I can imagine it in my mind. Lots of things happen in your writing which keeps the reader interested.
    Well done.
    Mrs Stones
    http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/

  2. Mrs Stones (Team 100WC) said,

    September 14, 2013 @ 8:17 pm     Reply

    Hi Nadine,

    Sorry about the mix up with the name.

    Mrs Stones

  3. nadine said,

    September 15, 2013 @ 5:21 pm     Reply

    thank you for your comment

  4. Aneesah said,

    September 17, 2013 @ 11:29 am     Reply

    hi Nadine i like the way you have started and the way you have used punctuation in the right place.check your spellings

  5. Sahar said,

    September 17, 2013 @ 11:35 am     Reply

    well done for writing 100 words.

  6. nadine said,

    November 3, 2013 @ 7:35 pm     Reply

    thank you for your nice comments

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